Here's a much tighter composition. I also flipped it, because the flow worked better. I wanted to avoid this, because the inspiration for this was a Drew Struzan illustration for an Aces & Eights box set, and now it looks more like that piece. But...if anything, that guy knows what he's doing, so I can't whine about it too much!
I'm going to do another pass, with some adjustments in the cropping, and sketch in a logo for placement. So one more sketch, then on to the value drawing.